Rewrite The Ending

Emma was really obsessed to try find what had scared he during the night. She always wondered to herself what was all those noises she kept hearing in the night. Sometimes she thought that there might be a man outside staring at her through the window or a monster scratching on the window. Sometimes she even scared to walk down the hallway. But she would always carry her favourite teddy bear with her if she was scared. Then she said to herself that she needed to handle it. She slowly walked down the hallway holding her teddy with all of her grip. Then she heard the T.V on. So she tip toed as fast as she could to the back of the couch. But then her mother caught her behind the couch. They both walked back to Emma's bed and tucked her back into bed. Emma quickly changed and said to herself that Special agents are not afraid of anything so she went to the window to see what the scary sounds were but it was just the shadow of a tree on the window. After that she knew that she was really silly for thinking that there was monsters outside. Then changed back and went fast to sleep. The main idea in story would be to never be afraid and be strong.

- Title

EJ12 In The Dark

- Author

Susannah Mcfarlane

- Type of Book

Adventure

- Why your ending is better

Because in the story everything turns out good and nothing happens but in my ending there is going to be the main idea of the story

Rewrite The Ending

After she had finished performing at the Shining Stars Competition. She had just remembered that she had left her dog at her dressing room. One of the agents said to her go to the back of the stadium. Emma changed back into her clothes and removed all of the make up. Then she headed to the backstage door and sure enough the limo was waiting for her outside. When she got home she made her a raspberry spider and had got a phone call from A1. "Well done EJ, Another mission completed. Then one of her friends said that they should do a duet. Emma said "Are you sure about this'. Then Elle said " sure, with a little help from all of you we will be perfect". The main idea in the story would be to never be afraid to try something new.

- Title

EJ12 Rocky Road

- Author

Susannah Mcfarlane

- Type of Book

Adventure

- Why your ending is better

Because in the story everything turns out good and nothing happens but in my ending there is going to be the main idea of the story

Rewrite The Ending

EJ12 has saved the day again and has everybody yelling so hard their throats were about to pop. After that she had just remembered that she had a big test for school the next day. So she raced as fast as she could back home on her board to try and finish her studies. As she got home her mother said she had to catch up in more school work because some of her tests are really low. Then her mother helped Emma in her studies. The next day at school she had to sit her big exam and she hoped that she would get most of the question right. When she finished her exam she took it to the front and then the teacher marked it. The whole class got there tests back and Emma was really happy because she had got all of her equations right. She had 2 really big days. The first day taking the baby penguin back to his home and the second day passing her exams. The main idea in this story would be to always focus in your school work instead of other things.

- Title

EJ12 Hot & Cold

- Author

Susannah Mcfarlane

- Type of Book

Adventure

- Why your ending is better

Because in the story everything turns out good and nothing happens but in my ending there is going to be the main idea of the story

New Cover

- Title

EJ12 Hot & Cold

- Author

Susannah Mcfarlane

- Type of Book

Adventure

- Why your cover is better

My cover is better because everything looks  amazing and everything is moved around to different spots, That’s why I think my cover is better.

Rewrite The Ending

After All of Sam's adventures, he finally realised that having nightmares are ok because you can always forget them but they will still come back. Sam also says to himself “How did all of this even start” Then he realised again. This all started because of my friend Bills death. But I think if anybody has nightmares than try to handle them as much as you can.

- Title

The Last Thirteen

- Author

James Phelan

- Type of Book

Mystery and Thriller

- Why your ending is better

Because instead of a sad ending it is going to be a good ending because sad ending make me feel sad.

Mary And Peter

Mary And Peter

Today Mary and Peter performed for us. They told us stories by acting them out with some of our students. I hope you enjoy my Animoto.

Easter Hunt

This is my Animoto I have made about Room 1. Today Room 9 had a Easter Hunt with them and had to find them around the whole school. We had alot of fun with them and everybody had smiles on their face.

IDentity Crew

Panmure Bridge School would like to thank the IDentity Dance Crew for performing for us and showing us your dance moves. We also thank you for giving us your message to encourage us to follow our dreams and no matter what anyone says, always fight for your dreams. We would like to say a great, big thank you to Jackie for organising this event for us from the C3 Church.

10 Fast Fingers

This is my 10 Fast Fingers. I think next time I could do much better.

Voice Thread

This is my Voice thread on my poem called The Secret Song written by Margaret Wise Brown. It also has my Poetry Rubric on it that Asmah assessed me on.

Poetry Rubric

I performed The secret song written by Margret Wise Brown. I think my expression was really good but I think I needed to put in a little bit more expression.

Care Presentation

This is a presentation about C.A.R.E, The C stands for Confident, The A stands for Attitude, The R stands for Respect and the E stands for Excellence and inovation. We have been learning about care because it is our school values. We are learning to understand how we will use the Panmure Bridge School values to help us make the most of our learning opportunities.

Xtra Maths

My score for Xtra Maths is improving everyday. In my Xtra Maths I only got one wrong. I think next time I would need to focus more in my maths.

Practise Poetry Recital Evaluation

Practise Poetry Recital Evaluation

Were you pleased with how you sounded? Why or why not?

A little bit, because I only know three verses of my poem and because I only made a little bit of eye contact.

What helped you learn your poem?

Having encouragement from my critical friend.

Did you look at your audience?

Only a little bit because I was reading the last two verses off the paper.

Did you speak clearly?

Yes because my critical friend could hear most of the words in my poem.

Did you use an expressive voice?

Not really, Because I only gave expression in certain parts of the poem.

What are your next steps?

Trying to know my poem off by heart and trying to make more eye contact to the audience.

This is me taking a evaluation about myself. The best thing in my evaluation is speaking clearly because when I was saying my poem to my critical friend he said I didn't mumble and said it in a load, clear voice.